Wednesday 25 September 2019

AFTERLIFE - 100 word story

The Friday Fictioneers photo of people queuing in the rain prompted me to revisit and rewrite one of my old stories...


PHOTO PROMPT © Na’ama Yehuda





AFTERLIFE


The last thing Bert remembered was his scolding wife.
Now he was queueing, in the rain!
Who knew?

'Morning, Bert. Name's Austin. How d’you want to return?'
'Return?'
'This new to you?'
'Course it's new...' Bert paused in astonishment.
'Ah! This is my fourth death. What’s it to be: guy or gal? I tried womanhood in 1840. Spent a miserable life in domestic service.'
‘This is so sudden.’
‘That’s death for you, Bert. Male or female?’
Images of his wife snarling over monthly unmentionables, childbirth and menopause flashed.
‘Male please,’ said Bert.
‘Good choice,’ said Austin.


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48 comments:

  1. Dear Susan,

    I'm not sure male's that great an option these days. ;) On the other hand...imaginative piece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. It's a matter of opinion, isn't it? My characters preferred the male option. Nothing else to be read into it - it's just a humorous story.

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  2. Definitely seems to be an easier life ... :D

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  3. Amusing, but with a wee bite.
    Like it a lot.

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  4. Pros and cons on both sides. Would be interesting to try a life in the other shoes though :-)

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    1. Personally, I don't think one gender is better or easier than the other! Thanks for commenting, Iain.

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  5. Hee :-) I thought maybe he'd go for "female" so she could have fun snarling at her husband :-)

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    1. He he - maybe he's too nice and easy going to want to experience the pain and frustrations of raging hormones? :)

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  6. Ah, well, I think there are some perceived benefits for the "male" choice but then again, there are many (more to me) for the "female" - so who knows ... ;)

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    1. Well, like I've already said - I don't think one gender is better than the other. Thanks for commenting. :)

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  7. Delightfully told tale, Susan.

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  8. I love it! Hahhaaaa. Men could not take it if they had to push out a watermelon out of you know where.

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    1. Especially if they've witnessed what it takes! Thanks for commenting, Birgit.

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  9. Well now, since this is going to be a recurring event, he might change his mind on his next go of it ;-)

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  10. There may be a lot more to consider than gender :)

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    1. Very true. In my original, longer version, he did have more to think about. Thanks for commenting, Reena.

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  11. I guess Bert's not such an experimenter.

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    1. He he - likes to stick to what he knows, perhaps? Thanks for commenting, Bernadette.

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    1. He he - now that would throw a spanner in the works, Keith! (no pun intended)

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  13. Think I'll stick with female, despite the down side!

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    1. I dunno - I could be tempted to try something different! :)

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    1. No he's not - but then again - we don't know what his wife was really like. :)

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  15. Ha ha a funny piece, what a decision to make, I guess he took the better the devil you know choice. Like this a lot

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    1. Yes, I think he decided to play safe. Thanks for the comment. :)

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  16. What a decision to have to make. I myself, would like to stay a woman, childbirth and all. I loved being pregnant.

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    1. I'm happy with my gender - but can't say I've enjoyed certain aspects that go with it! Thanks for commenting.

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  17. It would be nice to have a choice (without the need for surgery and hormones). I think, given the option, I would stay male. I am constantly in awe of the things women endure while maintaining grace and beauty. I feel like I'm going to die when I get a cold.

    This reminds me of a short story by Andy Weir called "The Egg." It has a similar reincarnation theme.

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    1. I'm not familiar with that story - I'll have to check it out. Thanks for commenting.

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  18. haha...nicely done. I had a good laugh reading your story, Susan but it also made me wonder why it is never easy being a woman in a man's world. Given a choice, who knows I might also be like Bert too!

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    1. Exploring the reasons for women's difficulties in the world would take more than a 100 word story. Thanks for commenting. :)

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  19. "Snarling over monthly unmentionables, childbirth and hot flashes"--yeah, I'd probably choose to be male, too :)

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    1. It's all down to perspective, isn't it? Thanks for commenting. (Did you try the blog signature description I gave you?)

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  20. he must have been highly evolved. some folks don't get to choose. :)

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  21. He is totally missing some fun. He needs to break away from his preconceived notions.

    Fun take on the prompt Susan.

    Cheerio!
    Natasha

    https://natashamusing.com/2019/09/the-show-must-go-on-friday-fictioneers-natasha-musing/

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    1. Perhaps that's the moral of the story? Thanks for the insight, Natasha.

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  22. Very inventive. Never having been male ;) it might seem easier on the surface.

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    1. Ha ha - my feeling is that Bert based his decision on his observations of his wife. Thanks for commenting, Sascha.

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