Wednesday, 27 February 2019

KEEPING IT ZIPPED - 100 word story

I looked at this week's Friday Fictioneers photo prompt and sighed. What do I know about New Mexico? It took me a while to find an angle. I'd be interested to know what you think of my effort.


PHOTO PROMPT © Jean L. Hays



KEEPING IT ZIPPED


Badger and Mickey are proper scary dudes.
Many stories about them are fabrication, but some are the god's honest truth. And we're talking seriously bloody bone chilling stories.
There's a rumour about Chunky, hideous enough to give you nightmares. Dismemberment is one thing, but did they really make Chunky do those other things?
But the shop is shut. Chunky hasn't been seen for weeks and his wife is walking around like she's got the devil sitting on her shoulder.
I don't show curiosity. Word gets around. Speculating could trigger Badger and Mickey to come a-calling, so I keep it zipped.





I hope you enjoyed this story and I look forward to your comments. 


If you wish to read more Friday Fictioneers stories, you can find them listed HERE


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56 comments:

  1. I always wonder about the stories behind closed businesses. After reading this, maybe I'm better not knowing.

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  2. Dear Susan,

    Badger and Mickey sound like dudes to stay away from. Remember, the story doesn't have to be about the location. It's all about what YOU see and how it inspires you. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yes, you're right. Thanks for the pep talk, Rochelle. :)

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  3. I think I'll just avoid this route, if you don't mind... I wouldn't want to accidentally scare these two peeps up...

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    1. No, you'd want to keep your head down if you wound up down their way. :)

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  4. Sounds like a couple of guys to avoid at all cost!

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    1. Yep, they're a scary pair. Thanks for commenting, Iain.

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  5. That's seriously scary, Susan.

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  6. I wrote about this prompt also and did not EVEN NOTICE the New Mexico part. LOL - Like yours, the few I have read have been scary or depressing. I guess that is what this picture conjures up. Scary story!!

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    1. Yes, the photo sort of gave me the creeps, hence the subject matter. Thanks for commenting.

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  7. A situation like that - might be better to leave town.

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    1. Or don't run in those circles, Alice!

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    2. Ah. So a bigger town than I was visualizing.

      Capcha just made me prove I'm human 7 times. It started to feel like a Facebook game.

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    3. Alice, are you saying you had to click on a Capcha on my blog? I didn't set up Capcha for the comments!! I will investigate.

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    4. Alice, I just checked my settings and this was turned on. I'm so sorry - but glad you mentioned it because I had no idea. It's now turned off... I hope!

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  8. Ohhhh this has a Twin Peaks feel. Enjoyed the story immensely.

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    1. Really? I've never watched Twin Peaks as I don't think it's available on Irish tv. :) Thanks for commenting, Tannille.

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    1. Blame the photo for making me take this angle, Alistair. :)

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  10. Very good use of the prompt and of your imagination!!

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    1. Thank you, Darlene - appreciate your feedback. :)

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  11. So Badger and Mickey made Chunky disappear and somehow you know how they did it?

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    2. Well, I'm really not sure how to take your comment, Abhijit.
      The narrator says: There's a rumour about Chunky,... and goes on to hint at what the rumour is.
      So, why do you think that I - or perhaps you mean the narrator - 'somehow know how they did it'?

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  12. Sounds like a terrific neighbourhood. Really folksy... :(

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    1. Place to avoid if you're not part of the gang, Sandra. :)

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  13. I think I would keep it zipped and skip town!

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  14. Creepy to the max! I think you succeeded quite well :)

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  15. I'd keep it zipped too! That really is very scary!

    My FriFic tale!

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    1. Glad I managed to convey the chilling elements effectively for you, Keith. :)

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  16. That reads like a part of a bigger, rather interesting, story.

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    1. Yes, I'm sure it could be expanded - but probably not by me! Thanks for commenting, Patsy.

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  17. That sounds like a dangerous place to live.

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    1. Yes, the sort of place where you need to keep yourself to yourself!

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  18. like they say, curiosity killed the cat. it's better safe than sorry.

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    1. You have to know when to keep your mouth shut, plaridel. Thanks for the comment.

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  19. Nice. Deli cover for a "chop shop".. Nice...

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  20. Yikes. I'd keep my mouth shut too.

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    1. Yes, anyone sensible would, wouldn't they, Shirley? Thanks for your comment.

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  21. Chunky is probably sleeping with the fishes as are others who disagreed with Badger and Mickey. Scary stuff.

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    1. Yes, his disappearance doesn't bode well. Thanks for commenting, Subroto.

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  22. Love the voice here, that scary pair of fellas, the hints at the awful things they did. Makes my imagination run riot! Well done Susan

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    1. Thanks for the feedback, Lynn. Glad you liked the story.

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  23. Scary and clever and amazing where the picture of a Deli t took you. ;)

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    1. That's what I like about the Friday Fictioneers - I never know what sort of story I'm going to write. :)

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  24. ZIP-pe-de-doo-dah!!!!
    All the way.

    Good read

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  25. When I first read the title I thought this was going in an entirely different direction. lol
    You surprised me!

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    1. He he - now I wonder where you thought the story was going to go, Dawn! :)

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  26. I like where the prompt took you. Imaginative and creepy. Somehow Chunky sounds more scary to me. Maybe because it sounds like "Chucky".

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    1. That's an interesting observation, Fatima. I hadn't thought of the similarity between Chunky and Chucky. Thanks for the feedback.

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Many thanks for commenting. I appreciate your feedback.