Wednesday 29 April 2020

HIDDEN HIDEAWAY - 100 word story

The following story is based on a true story that happened to me a few years ago when we experimented with running a bed & breakfast.





HIDDEN HIDEAWAY





‘Welcome to Hidden Hideaway!’

Sally ushered her guests to their room, vaguely wondering why they’d arrived in separate cars. She mentally shrugged and went to cut slices of carrot cake.

Balancing the tray of cake in one hand, she knocked on her guests’ door. Nothing. She knocked again and put her ear to the door. The moaning instantly ceased, following by a creaking, scrambling noise.

Sally’s smile froze. She hesitated before, face flaming, she crept away.

The next morning Sally waited in dread, wondering how they were all going to play things when her guests came down for breakfast.





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49 comments:

  1. Dear Susan,

    Can you say 'awkward'? I'm sure breakfast will make for interesting table talk. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. In the real version, I smiled politely and they smiled knowingly and we all continued as if nothing had happened.

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  2. They checkout the next day, didn't they?
    In separate cars :)
    The title is so apt. Truly awkward for you to have been through this. Thus, you decided to stop the 'experiment'?

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    1. Ha ha - no, that isn't why we stopped running the B&B! What I learned from that particular experience was to offer cake when I was showing guests to their room and make it clear that I would be bringing it up straight away.

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  3. How delightfully old-fashioned Sally is

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    1. Hmm, I don't think she was being old-fashioned. I think she was simply surprised at their speed of getting down to rumpy pumpy and embarrassed about disturbing them.

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  4. Ah, intrigue, intrigue. Nice one.

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    1. Yes, she never did find out their back story. :)

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  5. Oh c'mon Sally (or Susan), what's a wee bit houghmagandie between consenting adults?
    No need for any awkwardness, it's just life

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    1. No problem at all CE - the awkwardness stemmed from disturbing her guests and potentially embarrassing them.

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  6. Um... Why, oh why did she go knocking on their door? Once they have been shown their room, I would never dare... ESPECIALLY if they arrived in separate cars!! ;-)

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    1. To give them cake! It's a hospitality thing.

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  7. Oops!

    We ran a small motel for a while, and every now and then we'd have someone check din--separate cars--and usually we'd never see the female component. What I always wondered is why on earth I should be feeling embarrassed :) I wasn't the one sneaking around!

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    1. Oops indeed! It never occured to me that they had checked in for a dirty weekend. In my defence, they were something like our third or fourth set of guests. What can I say? I was inexperienced and naive. :)

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  8. Good description of an awkward moment.

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  9. It must have been their first time or they hadn't seen each other in a while...I'll bet the former because, you know, even with an affair, after a while it's not that fast, down and dirty. Too bad you didn't play some porn music...hahahaaaa

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    1. I think you're right. They must have been taking their clothes off the minute they shut the door.

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  10. Are you traveling for business or pleasure? Any plans while your here? i mean, outside of the bedroom, of course... Hmmm, conversation might be a little awkward..

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    1. He he - yes, I think it's called 'small talk'! :)

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  11. I like that. Don't waste any time. Just get to it. Then, there's time to do it again. Sally doesn't have to be embarrassed the next morning. She can just say, "Your wife/husband called." Embarrassment transferred.

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  12. i think they deserve a hearty breakfast to keep their energy level up. :)

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  13. Just adds a bit of spice to life!

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    1. True, although personally I think I'll stick to monogamy. :)

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  14. No time to waste when your "business trip" is for one night only :-)

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    1. They certainly didn't waste any time, did they? :)

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  15. I'm sure you have many interesting stories from your time as a B and B owner. THis is funny!

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    1. We only ran for one season, but I have enough material for a memoir! It was such an eye opener. :)

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    2. I´m looking forward to the book!!

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  16. Did they sign in as Mr and MRs Smith?

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    1. He he - no, unpronounceable Polish (I think). :)

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  17. Teehee! I think the guest house owner was a little naïve there! I bet the guests said nothing about it in the morning.

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    1. Yes indeed, very, very naive! The guests smiled, said nothing, and gave her a 5* review. :)

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  18. Oh dear, Susan, embarrassing for you, but I'm sorry, I can't help laughing. I'd have loved to have seen the look on your face at that moment. In one person's awkward moment, another will find pure, cruel comedy. :-)

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    1. It's okay, Michael my aim was to make people laugh with this story. I definitely saw the humour in it afterwards and it's one of my favourite reminisces from those days.

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  19. Haha... you should've served them cake when they checked in! I wonder why they didn't go to a big hotel instead, where they would've been unlikely to meet the owners. Funny anecdote, Susan.

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    1. Thanks for commenting, Magarisa. Who knows what they were thinking - but they did enjoy their stay!

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  20. Sounds as though they were pleased to see each other. Very pleased.

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    1. Gosh, yes they were indeed very pleased! :)

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  21. I think this happens quite often in hotels.. I think they won't have breakfast at all

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    1. Ha ha - maybe they won't! Thanks for commenting. :)

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