Wednesday, 18 April 2018

SPIRIT SPINNER - 100 word story

The photo prompt this week intrigued me and I could only guess what the contraption was - rather like the character in my story. 
I did some research and hope I've got it more right than my character!


PHOTO PROMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy


SPIRIT SPINNER 


The first time I saw Jodie she was twirling on John's lawn.
'Don't be fooled.' said John. 'She's a fruitcake.'
But Jodie beguiled me.
'I made these.' Jodie showed me dream catchers. Delicate and ethereal. 'I love the idea of capturing dreams. Don't you?'
I nodded sagely and told her, 'yes.'
'That's my spirit spinner.' Jodie pointed at a contraption in the yard. 'It allows my spirit to dance freely on the astral plane. I bought it from a Wise Woman.'
A memory stirred.
'Um, Isn't it something to do with golf?' I said.
Jodie gave me a pitying look.




I hope you enjoyed reading this and I look forward to your comments. 

If you wish to read more Friday Fictioneers stories, you can find them listed HERE



If you'd like to join in the challenge, you'll find all the information posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields 
- her blog is listed on 'My Blog List' on the right hand side of this page.

On a final note - I always try to visit the blogs of everyone who comments on mine. If I haven't commented on yours it's either because I haven't been able to find your blog when I've clicked on your name or because you have a wordpress account that requires me to sign in first. 



85 comments:

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    1. He he - well she believes it - and I'm all for harmless dreamers, Keith!

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  2. That evoked a wry smile

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    1. Good! That's a valid reaction. Thanks for commenting. :)

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  3. Dream catcher and Spirit spinner - truly mystical & intriguing!
    Well expressed, Susan!

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    1. Thanks, Anita. Certainly an object to mystify!

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  4. Something captured my dreams last night. Weird zombie-like dream. My heroine won in the end, but it was a near thing.

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    1. He he - I've never really understood how dream catchers are supposed to work! I'll have to ask Jodie. :)

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  5. LOL! I love the pitying look. So obtuse.

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    1. Yes, Jodie clearly thought he didn't understand. Thanks for commenting.

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  6. Dear Susan,

    Sometimes I think I should adopt your last comment. I feel the same way. With the size of our group, reading and commenting on all of them is a labor even if it is of love. As I've said before, when someone consistently does not bother to comment on mine, I return the favor.

    Now that I've sounded off, I love your take on the prompt. I didn't know what that thing was until 6 years ago when I met Doug, the professional disc golf player. Jodie, might be a fruitcake, but an endearing one. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks, Rochelle. Yes, I'm afraid I'm now loosely keeping track of comments. Last week I commented on over 60 blogs and less than half returned the favour. Persistent non-commenters will be weeded out!

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    2. I do the same, Susan. I open up my "comments" section, type in the name if I feel it's been a long time or never and am usually greeted with a blank. And I, too, return the favour..

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    3. I find it sad and a little baffling when fellow writers fail to support each other, Dale.

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    4. Everyone lets one or two slip through the net from time to time, but systematically not returning a comment is pure bad manners, I think. And not thanking the commenter as well as not returning the courtesy... :(

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    5. I don't seem to be able to add another comment independently, so I'll just say here that I love the sound of Jodie. She's my kind of girl... :)

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    6. Thanks, Sandra. And- yes, of course I always give people the benefit of the doubt when it comes to returning comments, but I've decided on a 'three strikes and they're out' policy. I just don't see why I should waste my precious time on discourteous people.

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  7. Maybe it's both, a multi functional object :) Love the mix of down to earth and dreamy in your characters Susan

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    1. Thanks, Lynn. Sometimes stories write themselves, and that's what happened with this one. :)

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  8. It was a very wise woman that managed to sell her that!

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    1. Yes, indeed, Iain - 'ware the charlatans!

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  9. Certainly made me smile. I like the dreamcatcher idea.

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    1. Thanks, Linda. Glad you liked it. :)

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  10. Ha.. I think it can find many uses... but it can capture things that spins.

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    1. Yes, it's just a case of where the imagination takes us. :)

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  11. Children can come up with all sorts of creative interpretations of words, objects, whatever... and then some idiot (usually an adult) has to inject a note of reality and mess it all up!

    It's like when a child receives a big toy, contained in a box, and after the toy is taken out of the box, the child climbs into the box and makes that box anything he or she desires!

    I used to take what I believe are called "lockseam curtain rods" and use one as a cane, a rifle, a submarine periscope, and more. And I would take an outdoor drink holder, the kind that has a top which is twisted into a shape like a spring, put my hand in the coiled part, and voila! I had a sword!

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    1. So true! I'll never forget my toddler niece disappearing into a fantasy world with nothing more special than an empty cotton reel.

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  12. I love your take! Magical - and let's face it, there is a decided lack of magic in this world, lately...

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    1. Thank you, Dale. Yes - let's use fictional stories to escape the real world!

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  13. I know what it is, but Jodie's explanation is so much more interesting. More power to her!

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    1. I agree, EagleAye - a little bit of mystique is more fun than the prosaic reality!

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  14. You show great imagination in turning the heavy artefact of the photoprompt into a spirit spinner, and excellent writing skills in making dippy Jodie so sympathetic.
    I'd love a device that allowed my spirit to dance freely on the astral plane. It sounds such a joyful thing to do!

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    1. Thanks for your feedback, Penny. I'm not sure what part of my subconscious the idea of a spirit spinner came from!

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  15. Ha! Ha! Jodie's explanation is much more interesting and I loved that last line.

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    1. Well it's more interesting to take something and look for a different twist - in my humble opinion - glad you enjoyed it.

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  16. Hey dude, don't be spoiling Jodie's calm :-) Love the "pitying look" she gives him.

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    1. Thanks for the feedback, Alistair - glad to hear the last line worked for you.

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  17. Love your take on the prompt, Susan.��
    Such a fun story. Thank you for ‘ astral planes’. I admire Jodie’s absolute faith in those two objects. Great writing.
    Best wishes,
    Moon

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    1. Thanks, Moon. I don't share Jodie's naivety, but I do like her innocence.

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  18. Why did you have to pour cold water on Jodie's explanation!

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    1. Because he likes her and he knew she'd been bamboozled by the Wise Woman. :)

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  19. Cute spiritually spinning piece.
    Randy

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  20. I love the idea of a spirit spinner. Even if she really is a fruitcake, she seems happy and that what matters. Nice take on the prompt!

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    1. Absolutely, Shivam. Nothing wrong with a bit of harmless spinning!

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  21. I'm still none the wiser - I don't know much about golf - but a Spirit Spinner sounds like something we all need!
    (Haven't taken part in this challenge yet, but I like to see what others make of the prompts.)

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    1. Linda, I'm learning to play golf, but I've never seen this thing! As for taking part - it took me months to decide to give it a try, but I'm so glad I did.

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  22. It looks like an instrument of torture to me! I think I would have gone down the grisly route, so well done for thinking of something a bit different.

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    1. Ha ha - I wouldn't have had you down for writing something gruesome, Helen!

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  23. For all I know of golf, both explanations might be correct.

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    1. I'm afraid the prosaic one is correct - but let's ignore that and follow Jodie's lead! :)

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  24. Haha sounds like he needs to use his imagination more! Great take on the prompt

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  25. Yes, maybe Jodie has got it right. Thanks for commenting - appreciate it.

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  26. I like her explanation. It's much better than a knight's underwear. :)

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    1. Ha ha - spirits flying free versus men's underwear? I know what I would choose. (And this is what I love about FF- the different interpretations on the photo prompt.)

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  27. I'll go with dream catcher and spirit spinner because until today I had no idea about disc golf.
    Nice take on the prompt Susan.
    Thanks,
    Norma.

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    1. Me neither, Norma. And of course, nor did Jodie. Thanks for commenting. :)

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  28. Very intriguing story. Enjoyed it.

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    1. Thanks for commenting, Lisa - good to know you enjoyed it.

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  29. I love Jodie's innocence and clearly it is this side of her that John likes, which may suggest he is a dreamer too. Deep inside hidden beneath all that scepticism. That said, Jodie needs someone to help her watch her spending habits.

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    1. Yes, Fatima - you're very perceptive! :)

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  30. Wow. Wonderful take on the prompt. Spirit spinner is very interesting and enigmatic.

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  31. Thanks, Jaya. I don't know where the idea of a Spirit Spinner came from - it's funny what the subconscious conjures up!

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  32. Oh, I think his chances with her just dropped. Wonderful and imaginative take on the prompt.

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    1. He'll have to redeem himself sharpish, won't he? Thanks for commenting, Gah. :)

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  33. Yes, it is a spirit-spinner Jodie, don't listen to these practical-types party-poopers.

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    1. Ha ha! Yes, let her keep her dreams, Anurag!

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  34. Great, I love the withering look at the end, some people are just too literal

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    1. Yes, it would be a dry old world if we didn't have people who look at things differently, Michael. Thanks for commenting.

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  35. well, what do you know? great spin on this week's prompt.

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  36. Love the way you ended the story, with Jodie giving the narrator a pitying look. I'll bet life is never dull for her. :-)

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    1. I'm glad you enjoyed the ending; it seemed appropriate. :)

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  37. Like the way you tell the story, most entertaining - mystical meets down to earth. Good one

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    1. Thanks for commenting - yes, I think contrasting characters make stories more interesting.

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  38. Love the story, and Jodie's pitying look. I wonder what other wonders she has in her collection.

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    1. Thanks, Sarah - yes, I might have to revisit Jodie's world in more stories to find out. :)

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  39. I, for one, would love to hear more about Jodie's world!! Sounds like I could learn something from her :)

    Great story!!

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    1. Ha ha - thanks, Rachel. The world might be a better place if we behaved like Jodie. :)

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  40. I never could figure out what it was, so a golf-thingy or dream-catcher works for me. Nicely done Susan.

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  41. Thank you! Appreciate your feedback. :)

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  42. Like the blend of mystical and down to earth, in the conversation. A satisfying story - well done.

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  43. Thank you - it's always so good to know when a story works for people! :)

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  44. I love her explanation and now I want one in my yard! Delightful take on the prompt.

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  45. Thanks, Alicia - it's a nice idea, isn't it? (Even though I don't believe it for one minute!)

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