Wednesday, 31 October 2018

ZOMBIE EYES - 100 word story

It's Halloween. Of course I had to write a Halloween story and this week's Friday Fictioneer's photo prompt was perfect for that.


PHOTO PROMPT © Jeff Arnold


ZOMBIE EYES

My cousin always gave me the creeps.
When she visited on Halloween, I wasn't happy.
Angie had arrived dressed like a zombie. The clothes were superfluous, she already had zombie eyes.
'You and Angie can go trick or treating,' said Mum.
We went knocking on doors.
Old Freddy shouted and sent us on our way, as I knew he would.
Angie didn't like that. Once home she sat and stared at Dad's chess set and I swear a piece moved.
We heard later that Old Freddy had died.
They said, from the look on his face he died of fright.

I hope you enjoyed this story and I look forward to your comments. 


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67 comments:

  1. Neil MacDonald31 October 2018 at 10:36

    Chess pieces as voudou dolls. Great!

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:00

      She needed something to channel her intention. :)

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  2. Sandra Crook31 October 2018 at 10:44

    Angie sounds like someone you might want to keep on the right side of. Topical take on the prompt.

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  3. Iain Kelly31 October 2018 at 12:19

    Perfect creepy Halloween tale Susan, well done.

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:01

      It was an easy one to write this week, Iain - those eyes...

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  4. Anita Sabat31 October 2018 at 12:55

    Apt Halloween story, Susan.
    Died of shock because of her eyes and looks...
    Some people have the ability to move things with their eyes like magic!
    Have a great week!
    Queen In Quicksand - Anita

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:01

      Angie's eyes are filled with magic and malice!

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  5. brudberg31 October 2018 at 13:15

    Ouch.. you really brought out a an evil story here.

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:02

      Careful, they'll be all around us this evening!

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  6. Snow's Fissures and Fractures31 October 2018 at 13:23

    No doubt, Angie is a force to be reckoned with...or not. Nicely done!

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:02

      I think we all have to take care when we see someone with scary eyes. :)

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  7. The Silver Fox31 October 2018 at 13:42

    And I'm sitting here wondering which chess piece moved...

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:02

      He he - I'll leave that to your vivid imagination. :)

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  8. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields31 October 2018 at 15:40

    Dear Susan,

    Timely use of the prompt. It does lend itself to spooky, doesn't it? Cringe-worthy story. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 16:03

      You chose the perfect photo for a Halloween story, Rochelle. :)

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  9. C. E. Ayr31 October 2018 at 18:25

    Creepyville Arizona!
    Nice one, Susan.

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 19:18

      Yes, Angie's pretty creepy. Thanks for commenting. :)

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  10. Penny Gadd31 October 2018 at 18:46

    Ha! Normally they just let your tyres down...Nice story, Susan

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 19:19

      I know! I'm afraid Angie took it a bit far, Penny. )

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  11. Dale31 October 2018 at 20:22

    Shudder! Well done, Susan. Perfect for this spookiest of nights...

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    1. Susan A Eames31 October 2018 at 21:52

      Thanks, Dale. The story wrote itself as soon as I saw the photo prompt. :)

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  12. Alicia31 October 2018 at 20:30

    Great Halloween story! Thank you.

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  13. Jo Hawk1 November 2018 at 00:30

    Angie is quite scary. I don't want her knocking on my door. Well done.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 November 2018 at 09:25

      Ignore the 'trick or treaters' at your peril, Jo.

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  14. Linda1 November 2018 at 01:26

    Third evil child, and I've only read 11 stories. Shivery stuff.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 November 2018 at 09:26

      He he - sorry - blame it on the photo prompt, Linda.

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  15. Unknown1 November 2018 at 02:59

    Cute. I went with Halloween too - especially since I have never played chess.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 November 2018 at 09:27

      Had to be done, didn't it?
      p.s. is that Jilly?

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  16. Abhijit Ray1 November 2018 at 05:07

    Little Angie doing black magic using chess pawns? Spooky!

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  17. draliman1 November 2018 at 07:44

    Dead for a want of a few sweets. Reminds me of the "accidental" fatalities in The Omen.

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  18. Darlene1 November 2018 at 08:54

    A great Halloween tale! Not easy to convey just the right amount of creepiness in so few words. Well done!

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    1. Susan A Eames1 November 2018 at 09:28

      Yes, it took quite a bit of editing. Glad it worked for you Darlene - thanks for commenting.

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  19. Keith's Ramblings1 November 2018 at 11:49

    I've got a friend called Angie who plays chess - now I'm worried!

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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  20. Unknown1 November 2018 at 12:22

    Creepy little girls with their zombie eyes. Nice one!

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  21. Priya1 November 2018 at 14:24

    Sent chills down my spine.
    Good one :)

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  22. liz young1 November 2018 at 16:24

    Not a cousin I would like to have! Well done, Susan.

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  23. plaridel1 November 2018 at 21:24

    you must have enjoyed writing this story as we did reading it. well done. :)

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    1. Susan A Eames1 November 2018 at 21:50

      This story virtually wrote itself, and yes I did enjoy writing it. :)

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  24. Anonymous2 November 2018 at 09:14

    So Angie executed poor old Freddy with her zombie eyes. If I had a cousin like Angie I'd hide under the bed. Trouble is, she'd probably be under there already. Well told. Jilly, Sugar on the Bee

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    1. Susan A Eames2 November 2018 at 11:38

      Yes, it's tricky when the relatives turn out to have supernatural powers! Thanks for commenting, Jilly.

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  25. lisarey1990@gmail.com2 November 2018 at 21:38

    Great idea. Wonderful read.

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  26. Brenda Cox3 November 2018 at 13:34

    He should have just given them some candy, it is called "trick" or treat for a reason. I enjoyed your stooky tale!

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    1. Susan A Eames3 November 2018 at 15:02

      Yes, the miserable curmudgeon (but he didn't deserve Angie's revenge).

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  27. Susan A Eames3 November 2018 at 20:57

    A continuation of the story? Now there's an idea, Stuart. Thanks for the feedback. :)

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  28. theministryofshrawleywalks3 November 2018 at 23:10

    yep, great stuff, I love a supernatural thriller

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  29. Subroto4 November 2018 at 03:00

    Spooky stuff! You've got to watch out for the zombie eyed ones.

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    1. Susan A Eames4 November 2018 at 10:27

      Yes, they're a dead give away.
      (See what I did there?)

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  30. Subroto4 November 2018 at 03:01

    Spooky stuff! You've got to watch out for the zombie eyed ones.

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  31. Piyali4 November 2018 at 11:21

    Now I get it why she gives you the creeps. I don't like Angie either. Great tale.

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    1. Susan A Eames4 November 2018 at 12:40

      No, she's not a nice person. Thanks for commenting, Piyali.

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  32. magarisa4 November 2018 at 15:13

    Whoa...this is really spooky! I really liked your reference to her zombie costume as superfluous. She certainly doesn't need anything to make her more scary.

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    1. Susan A Eames4 November 2018 at 17:24

      No, Angie is one scary child without any Halloween accoutrements! :)

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  33. Michael Wynn5 November 2018 at 09:51

    Angie sounds like some piece of work. Poor Freddie

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    1. Susan A Eames5 November 2018 at 10:06

      Yes, she's a scary, unpredictable, touchy child. Thanks for commenting, Michael.

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  34. Dawn6 November 2018 at 17:35

    This would be an excellent story to tell around a campfire!

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