Wednesday, 7 October 2020

JUST A STORM - 100 word story

This week's Friday Fictioneers photo prompt gives us the result of storm damage on what looks like an English pier. This story wrote itself.


PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook


JUST A STORM



They returned in ones and twos.

Angelika turned on them. 'There, now do you get it? Climate change does affect us.'

'It was just a storm, Geli,' said Noddy.

'Not just a storm. Our homes are destroyed. I told you we were too close to the shore.'

The others burbled:

she's right,

not just a storm,

we're doomed...

'We can make repairs,' said Noddy.

Angelika parodied him, 'we can make repairs.' She flicked her tail in disgust.

Noddy looked at her helplessly before rallying. He pointed at the underwater pier structure with his trident. 'Come on, folks. Rebuild time.'



I hope you enjoyed this story and I look forward to your comments. 


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56 comments:

  1. Tannille7 October 2020 at 11:00

    Hahaha, loved the twist. Is this story set in the same world as the leprechauns? I can see them interacting.

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 15:54

      Thanks, Tannille. Yes, I think this ties into the magical Leprechaun world - although it's a stand alone story too. :)

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  2. C. E. Ayr7 October 2020 at 11:11

    Seems like we all have the same problems, only difference is some of us don't have tridents

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 15:56

      Yes, well, a trident might solve some of my problems. :)

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  3. Neil MacDonald7 October 2020 at 11:23

    They may need more than rebuilding. I loved that the trident wielder was called Noddy

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 15:57

      Thanks, Neil. I have no idea where his name bubbled up from, but once I'd written it down there was no changing it!

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    2. Penny Gadd7 October 2020 at 22:02

      Perhaps it was Noddy "Trident" Holder?

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    3. Susan A Eames11 October 2020 at 20:13

      Ah, maybe I was picturing him in some subliminal way! :)

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  4. Sandra Crook7 October 2020 at 11:41

    Let's hear it for pier restoration. It's an on-going reality in our neck of the woods. Love the trident wielder.

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 15:57

      Thanks, Sandra. Yes, these underwater folk will at least be able to shore up the underside of the pier.

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields7 October 2020 at 12:07

    Dear Susan,

    I guess even mer-people have their issues with climate change. ;) I love the way you clued us in with the flick of a tale.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 15:59

      Thanks, Rochelle. I tried to write it so that the ending wouldn't be too obvious.

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  6. Na'ama Yehuda7 October 2020 at 15:16

    Well, at least we humans aren't alone ... ;)

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 16:00

      Well, not if you believe in magic anyway. (Which I don't, but I enjoy writing about it.) :)

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    2. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 16:18

      I do wish you'd amend your settings to allow me to leave a reciprocal comment on your blog instead of asking me 'log in'.

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  7. liz young7 October 2020 at 15:28

    I hope Noddy gets his way. Nice twist, Susan!

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 16:01

      Oh, I think the rest of the Mer-folk will follow him rather than the slightly acerbic Angelika, Liz. :)

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  8. Iain Kelly7 October 2020 at 17:21

    Can't ignore the growing evidence of climate change! Especially those who live in the sea!

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  9. Keith's Ramblings7 October 2020 at 17:24

    They are going to be in demand after the storms we've just endured along our coast! Can I have Noddy's phone number please?

    Here's mine!

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  10. Trent McDonald7 October 2020 at 17:44

    Great twist of the tail, I mean tale...

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  11. Ronda Del Boccio7 October 2020 at 19:39

    Good one! Love it.
    Ronda

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 22:02

      Thanks for commenting, Ronda. Glad you liked it.

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  12. plaridel7 October 2020 at 20:57

    hope isn't lost when somebody has positive attitude. like they say, when the going gets tough, the tough gets going. :)

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  13. Penny Gadd7 October 2020 at 22:05

    I like the way you show your merfolk taking part in political discourse. Go for it, Noddy!

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    1. Susan A Eames7 October 2020 at 22:20

      He will, Penny, he will! Thanks for commenting.

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  14. Nobbinmaug7 October 2020 at 22:22

    You caught me with Angelika's tail. I had to stop and reorient myself. I think Angelika and Noddy need to learn to work together. You can rebuild, but you also have to fix the underlying problem.

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    1. Susan A Eames8 October 2020 at 09:58

      I think these two have always had personality clashes. It's just something they've learned to live with. :) Thanks for commenting.

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  15. Dale8 October 2020 at 01:07

    Love this, Susan! One would think that those living below would not suffer as much...

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    1. Susan A Eames8 October 2020 at 10:00

      Thanks, Dale. I think all living creatures are suffering the consequences of what we humans are doing to the planet.

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  16. Dora8 October 2020 at 01:54

    What a charming sketch of mer-people! They're almost exactly like us, but for the trident. If only we could get some of thoseand knock some sense into our politicians!

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  17. draliman8 October 2020 at 06:20

    I liked the twist - "too close to the shore" took on a different meaning! A message for us in there too :-)

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    1. Susan A Eames8 October 2020 at 10:01

      Thank you. Glad to know the clues were subtle enough to work the twist.

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  18. Anita Sabat8 October 2020 at 07:17

    That's the Noddy spirit!
    I nod my head in approval!
    Let's rebuild. Never say die!

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  19. Subroto8 October 2020 at 07:29

    `We are polluting our oceans with plastic anyway. Probably kill it before the climate change. Seems to be the tail for our times. Though I would have never guessed Poseidon's nickname.

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    1. Susan A Eames8 October 2020 at 10:02

      Yes, it's a sad indictment of human interference with nature.

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  20. Danny James8 October 2020 at 21:25

    Still laughing!!!!

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  21. Isadora De La Vega8 October 2020 at 22:13

    One thing we can count on here in Florida is hurricanes. You had me in the aftermath of one in your story. BUT ... we pull our big girl pants on and begin clean-up with a smile. The price we pay for paradise. I enjoyed your story, Susan. Have a great day … Be Safe
    Isadora ��

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    1. Susan A Eames10 October 2020 at 20:05

      Thanks, Isadora. (I have experience of cyclones from when I lived in Fiji - the clean up is almost worse than the storm experience itself!)

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  22. Birgit8 October 2020 at 22:16

    This is a good twist in the end and they would feel it worst of all.

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    1. Susan A Eames10 October 2020 at 20:05

      Thanks for the feedback, Birgit. Appreciate it.

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  23. JadeLi9 October 2020 at 03:43

    If I'm getting your story straight, the mechanism for time is a structure under water that the sea people will have to rebuild because climate change wrecked it? Sounds about right :(

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    1. Susan A Eames10 October 2020 at 20:06

      Yes, the storm wrecked their homes which were built beneath the pier. :)

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  24. Susan A Eames10 October 2020 at 20:07

    Thanks for commenting, Rob. :)

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  25. Bernadette11 October 2020 at 08:38

    Was that Atlantis before it sank?

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    1. Susan A Eames11 October 2020 at 10:30

      Oh, I like that idea! Something to ponder. :)

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  26. Mags11 October 2020 at 22:34

    What a clever twist! A good reminder that global warming doesn't just affect those who live on land. Nicely done, Susan.

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    1. Susan A Eames12 October 2020 at 10:24

      Thanks, Mags. (As a scuba diver I'm sadly all too aware of what global warming is doing to our seas.)

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  27. Linda12 October 2020 at 03:05

    I'm really late reading other stories this week. I'm so glad I didn't miss this one :) What a wonderful twist!

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    1. Susan A Eames12 October 2020 at 10:24

      Thank you for the feedback, Linda - appreciate it. :)

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