Wednesday, 29 May 2019

OFF THE TOURIST TRAIL - 100 word story

Lovely surprise this morning when I saw that Rochelle had chosen one of my photos for this week's Friday Fictioneers photo prompt. After last week's humorous story, I went dark with this little re-write.


OFF THE TOURIST TRAIL


Bradley sat in the boat, congratulating himself for his adventurous decision.
“Welcome!” Sami led Bradley off the beach. “Hungry?” Sami gave him some meat.
“What is this?”
“Pork.”
“Tastes different.”
“We breed special pigs.”
… … …

Bradley woke disoriented. He could hear muffled thuds and wandered towards the sounds.
Whispers, whimpers and a stink of blood and fear. The machete glinted as it sliced through the pale limbs.
Women tossed portions into a bubbling pot. Bradley vomited.
Up in the coconut palm Sami got on his phone. “Send more tourists – we only have one left.”



I hope you enjoyed this story and I look forward to your comments. 

I will be away vagabonding in June. See you when I return in July.

If you wish to read more Friday Fictioneers stories, you can find them listed HERE


If you'd like to join in the challenge, you'll find all the information posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields 


- her blog is listed on 'My Blog List' on the right hand side of this page.


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62 comments:

  1. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields29 May 2019 at 11:25

    Dear Susan,

    Oh my, this story did make my gorge rise. I guess you could call it the other other white meat. Well done. And what a photo. Thank you for that.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 12:03

      Thanks, Rochelle. I was living in Fiji when I took this photo and since Fiji used to be called The Cannibal Isles... what can I say?

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  2. Neil MacDonald29 May 2019 at 11:40

    Ah, long pig. Delicious

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 12:03

      He he - I hope you don't know it's delicious from personal experience, Neil! :)

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  3. Tannille29 May 2019 at 11:53

    Apparently we taste like chicken.
    Story left a bad taste in my mouth - well done.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 12:04

      I don't think I ever want to find out if that's true, Tannille! :)

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  4. Anita Sabat29 May 2019 at 11:59

    Gosh! Special pigs indeed.Such a scare.
    Tourists beware!

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 12:05

      Yes, watch out if you venture off the tourist trail.

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  5. Ann W29 May 2019 at 12:35

    Not a story to read just before lunch!
    Ann

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  6. kalpana solsi29 May 2019 at 12:57

    this read made my bile rise. well written.

    https://ideasolsi65.blogspot.com/2019/05/the-cellphone.html

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  7. Keiths Ramblings29 May 2019 at 13:27

    I've eaten all kinds of strange things around the world but not this - at least, I don't think so! Thanks for the picture - so good I used it twice!

    My go at Friday Fictioneers!

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 15:37

      Eek - let's hope not, Keith. (Pic is from my Fiji days.)

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  8. Trent McDonald29 May 2019 at 13:56

    Tourist stew, what a delicacy...

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 15:38

      They seem to like it anyway. Thanks for commenting, Trent.

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  9. Iain Kelly29 May 2019 at 14:56

    We're all just meat at the end of the day! Gory stuff!

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  10. Linda29 May 2019 at 15:29

    Oh, Susan. Made me shiver. Of COURSE he threw up, and I'm wondering when he realized he was going to be part of the menu.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 15:41

      In my original story the hapless tourist is 'herded' into a pen. :)

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  11. Birgit29 May 2019 at 15:41

    Oh yucky but I had a feeling they got the cookbook “To Serve Man” from those Aliens on the Twilight Zone

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 15:43

      He he - I don't know about that, Birgit. I wrote the story because Fiji used to be called The Cannibal Isles, for good reason. :)

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  12. Penny Gadd29 May 2019 at 16:30

    Neatly and succinctly written, Susan. Perhaps Bradley's decision was a little too adventurous...

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 17:25

      Definitely too adventurous, Penny! Thanks for the feedback.

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  13. tedstrutz29 May 2019 at 20:26

    Oh, My, God!

    Thanks for the photo prompt, Susan... I had my story in 15 seconds. That's when you know the prompt is a good one.

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  14. David Stewart29 May 2019 at 21:55

    Great picture and a nice gory tale to go with it. I enjoyed it. :)
    -David

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  15. Russell Gayer29 May 2019 at 22:13

    Darn, down to one? I bet he's old and tough too. Better use a pressure cooker.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 May 2019 at 22:16

      Unless they can ship a few more in! Thanks for the comment, Russell.

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  16. Gah Learner29 May 2019 at 23:19

    Gulp. That was indeed dark.

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  17. Dale29 May 2019 at 23:51

    Look at you, you gory thing you!
    Great stuff!

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    1. Susan A Eames30 May 2019 at 13:03

      Sometimes you just have to go to the dark side. :)

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  18. Unknown30 May 2019 at 02:01

    Oh, vicious! How could you just off all those tourist? Well done

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    1. Kelley Farrell30 May 2019 at 02:04

      Ah, I hit the wrong "reply as".

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    2. Susan A Eames30 May 2019 at 13:03

      No worries - and thanks for commenting, Kelley.

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  19. plaridel30 May 2019 at 02:26

    it's like a tour from hell. i feel sorry for him.

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  20. Sandra Crook30 May 2019 at 07:42

    Thankfully I ate a light breakfast. Bradley is on the menu for tonight I think.

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  21. draliman30 May 2019 at 07:43

    Nothing like a nice bit of long pig to make you wanna... throw up :-) Poor tourists...

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    1. Susan A Eames30 May 2019 at 13:05

      You have to be careful out there in the big wide world. :)

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  22. P.S. Joshi30 May 2019 at 08:04

    That was dark, Susan but also well written. What a terrible place that was. ---- Suzanne

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    1. Susan A Eames30 May 2019 at 13:07

      I learnt quite a lot about Fijian history when I lived there. In their past they were brutal warriors and yet possessed wonderful humanity. Real conundrum there!

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  23. C. E. Ayr30 May 2019 at 08:44

    The locals have to eat too!
    Great photo, Susan

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  24. Brenda Cox30 May 2019 at 15:27

    Had trouble posting my comment yesterday. Anyway ... gruesome tale. Gave me the shivers. Great writing!

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    1. Susan A Eames30 May 2019 at 17:32

      Yes, it's a gruesome one, isn't it? Thanks for feedback, Brenda.

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  25. Donna B. McNicol30 May 2019 at 19:08

    Note to self, don't visit tropical islands with strangers! Phew!!

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    1. Susan A Eames30 May 2019 at 20:26

      He he - thank goodness this is fiction, eh? :)

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  26. Patsy31 May 2019 at 13:20

    I'm no longer hungry.

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    1. Susan A Eames31 May 2019 at 17:28

      Sorry, Patsy, but thanks for commenting. :)

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  27. NEEL ANIL PANICKER31 May 2019 at 17:52

    This is as gory as they come. Well written, though, and what a pix, Susan!

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    1. Susan A Eames31 May 2019 at 19:49

      Thanks, Neel. I've done my fair share of travel writing, which entails supplying photos to go with the articles. Although I've never used this particular one!

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  28. margirene1 June 2019 at 09:54

    I love that Sami has a hotline to the supplier - could be a new venture for Uber Eats. Nice bit a dark humour. Great photo too.

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  29. margirene1 June 2019 at 09:54

    of dark humour, I meant to say.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 June 2019 at 12:07

      That's technology for you, Margirene! Thanks for commenting. :)

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  30. Karen1 June 2019 at 11:01

    I thought it was very funny! Well-written, too. I AM a little concerned about the number of jocular references to long pig. Remind me to absent myself from any writer's get-together.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 June 2019 at 12:07

      Yes, who knew that about writers, eh? Thanks for commenting, Karen. :)

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  31. Dawn1 June 2019 at 14:38

    Oh my...

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    1. Susan A Eames1 June 2019 at 19:55

      What can I say? Thanks for the succinct comment, Dawn. :)

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