Wednesday, 22 November 2017

Cupboard Love - a 100 word story

Here's my story based on the photo prompt for Friday Fictioneers.



Cupboard Love
PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The waiter had a Gigolo smile and cheekbones so sharp they could slice bread. Rita checked her creased cleavage.
He returned with coffee.
"Thaaank you.” She jiggled her bosom.
The waiter tensed. Oh, she knew that look!
“Madam is welcome.”
His accent was delectable.
“Your English is good, but I could teach you more. I’m very experienced.” She glanced down suggestively, thus missing the horrified look that swept across the waiter’s face as he fled.
Rita smiled. With patience she'd reel this little fishy in.
And she had some tape left in her closet from the last one.  


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65 comments:

  1. Anonymous22 November 2017 at 12:16

    Rita is a loveky creation

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  2. Susan A Eames22 November 2017 at 12:31

    Thanks, Neil. She's a clever, sinister lady.

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  3. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields22 November 2017 at 12:33

    Dear Susan,

    Cougar alert! He's smart to run...and keep running. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Susan A Eames22 November 2017 at 12:46

      Thanks, Rochelle - I think it was her creased cleavage that scared him off! But will she get him in the end?

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  4. Iain Kelly22 November 2017 at 12:58

    I hope the waiter keeps running! Good fun.

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  5. Snow's Fissures and Fractures22 November 2017 at 13:30

    Maybe this one will get away...Nicely done.

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    1. Susan A Eames22 November 2017 at 14:24

      Thanks, Lore - he might get away, but she's "very experienced"! :)

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  6. krawson22 November 2017 at 14:12

    She's a naughty one. Love the playful, wicked edge to this.

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  7. James22 November 2017 at 14:49

    The predator baiting her trap. I couldn't help but think about whether or not he might be gay.

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    1. Susan A Eames22 November 2017 at 16:48

      Who knows, James? I thought he was simply freaked out by being chatted up by an older woman. :)

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  8. Penny Gadd22 November 2017 at 15:54

    Excellent twist at the end. I liked the gigolo smile, too!

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  9. Unknown22 November 2017 at 16:44

    Yikes! A real femme fatale. Hope he doesn't get tempted by the opportunity to 'improve his english.'

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  10. The Silver Fox22 November 2017 at 17:49

    "Creased cleavage" certainly does conjure up an appropriate image here.

    I've known a couple of Ritas in my life.

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    1. Susan A Eames22 November 2017 at 18:36

      Ha ha - and did you run for your life, I wonder? :)

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    2. The Silver Fox22 November 2017 at 19:10

      When I was in my teens, twenties, and early thirties, I don't think I ever ran from any woman, although there certainly were some I should have avoided!

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    3. Susan A Eames22 November 2017 at 19:50

      Ah, men! :)

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  11. moon22 November 2017 at 18:54

    Rita somehow reminded me of Samantha from sex and the city except that Samantha wasn't dangerous, as such.
    He was smart to exit on time.
    Superbly written.

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  12. Linda22 November 2017 at 19:35

    Yikes. Run fast, Waiter. Danger in the room!

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  13. draliman23 November 2017 at 07:57

    Ha, he doesn't know what a close call that was! Nice one.

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  14. Sandra Crook23 November 2017 at 08:14

    It seems that Rita will get her kicks whatever way she can. Some very graphic images here, I could almost see the waiter's face and the coy downward glance of your main character. Good one.

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    1. Susan A Eames23 November 2017 at 10:14

      Thanks, Sandra - glad to know my imagery worked for you.

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  15. Darlene23 November 2017 at 08:28

    Great story!!

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    1. Susan A Eames23 November 2017 at 10:15

      Hi stranger! How are you? Thanks for commenting.

      p.s. Darlene - can you leave a link so that I can find your blog?

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  16. Patsy23 November 2017 at 08:52

    Lucky escape for him, I think!

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  17. Keith's Ramblings23 November 2017 at 09:47

    Yikes, she's one to avoid! Nice one Susan

    Click to read my FFfAW!

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  18. Dahlia23 November 2017 at 14:38

    She's too smart for him - he can run all he wants :D

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  19. liz young23 November 2017 at 14:50

    Those words 'creased cleavage' reminds me of an unfortunately placed tattoo I saw once in Tenerife. Nice one, Susan.

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  20. Unknown24 November 2017 at 01:01

    I think Rita may have a little more trouble reeling this one in. You set the scene well - I could see it perfectly.

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  21. Subroto24 November 2017 at 03:31

    Nice one. There is a Hemmingway quote that could apply to Rita's fishing skills “You roll back to me.” :-)

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  22. P.S. Joshi24 November 2017 at 05:43

    Rita sounds like a cougar with fangs and claws, a dangerous animal. The waiter was right in following his instincts. Good writing, Susan. :) --- Suzanne

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  23. Ginger7224 November 2017 at 10:21

    Such women scare me. Good take though.

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  24. Anurag Bakhshi24 November 2017 at 11:05

    I like wicked stories, normal is so boring. Two thumbs up.

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  25. brudberg24 November 2017 at 21:59

    Somehow I have a feeling that she will have some trouble reeling him in this time around.

    Maybe the waiter is gay.

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    1. Susan A Eames24 November 2017 at 22:35

      Ha ha - maybe! You're not the only one who made that speculation. I think it's more likely he was disturbed by that creased cleavage!

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  26. Lynn Love25 November 2017 at 14:51

    I have one piece of advice for him - run! Love your details. Susan, the cleavage, the suggestive wiggle. Well written story

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    1. Susan A Eames25 November 2017 at 15:15

      Thanks, Lynn - glad to know you enjoyed the story and appreciated those little details.

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  27. Joanne Sisco25 November 2017 at 17:58

    Yikes - this woman is more than a little creepy!! A great little vignette!

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  28. Susan A Eames25 November 2017 at 18:18

    She certainly is, Joanne. Glad you liked it. :)

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  29. Unknown26 November 2017 at 07:58

    Scary lady! I like the ambiguity of where power lies here. Good story.

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    1. Susan A Eames26 November 2017 at 12:16

      Thanks, Rachel. It's always so satisfying when readers 'see' what I try to portray.

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  30. Anonymous26 November 2017 at 18:59

    So well set up. I hope the poor waiter keeps on running.

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    1. Susan A Eames26 November 2017 at 21:47

      He's vulnerable and Rita knows it, Sarah. Thanks for commenting.

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  31. d.Avery26 November 2017 at 20:57

    It was cougary creepy enough before the tape.

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  32. Susie Clevenger27 November 2017 at 05:40

    Uh oh, There is evil planning in her seduction. Love the closet twist in your story.

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  33. Susan A Eames27 November 2017 at 11:01

    Thanks for your comment, Susie. Yes, she's got plans for him!

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  34. Magarisa27 November 2017 at 20:41

    Loved your descriptions, especially "creased cleavage" and "gigolo smile". I feel sorry for the "fishies" she catches! Creative take on the prompt.

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  35. Susan A Eames27 November 2017 at 20:49

    Thank you, Magarisa!

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  36. Unknown28 November 2017 at 01:16

    This story made me smile because I didn't expect the ending. Well done in disguising where you were going. Clever twist for the photo prompt.
    Isadora 😎

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  37. Susan A Eames28 November 2017 at 09:51

    Thank you, Isadora. I'm glad my surprise ending worked for you.

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Many thanks for commenting. I appreciate your feedback.

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