Wednesday, 29 November 2017

GRANNY SMITH - 100 word story

Here is my 100 word story courtesy of the Friday Fictioneers photo prompt. 


GRANNY SMITH
PHOTO PROMPT © What’s His Name



She said the apple was named after her. 
In return for humongous slabs of apple pie, we children kept her orchard tidy. The rest of the garden was out-of-bounds.
She warned us about the falling-down shed. 
'It's dangerous.' Her roly-poly smile vanished. 'Don't let me catch you in there.'
When rumours started about the falling-down shed I began to notice other oddities, like how Granny Smith licked children's grazed knees before applying antiseptic. 
I got curious.
While she was busy making pies I crept into the falling-down shed. Behind the bath were bundles of curious children's bones.
A footfall sounded.




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61 comments:

  1. Trent McDonald29 November 2017 at 13:09

    Sometimes it is best to ignore our curiosity and leave well enough alone... Good one.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 13:22

      Absolutely - you know what they say about curiosity killing the cat.

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  2. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields29 November 2017 at 13:13

    Dear Susan,

    The sight of her licking children's knees made me shudder. Well done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 13:22

      Yes, our Granny Smith has some shudder-inducing habits.

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  3. moon29 November 2017 at 13:46

    She sounds like a witch in disguise. I hope she will have the time to run.
    Great storytelling, Susan.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 15:57

      Thanks for your comment. I don't know if she's a witch - but she's certainly inhuman.

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  4. Anonymous29 November 2017 at 14:03

    A modern fairy tale!

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 15:58

      I hadn't thought of it that way - but you're right - it could be a modern fairy tale.

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  5. James29 November 2017 at 14:29

    Sounds like someone Hansel and Gretel met once.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 15:59

      Ah, another reader seeing this as a fairy tale. :)

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  6. Dale29 November 2017 at 15:46

    Oh that is most ominous... anyone who licks wounds before healing them...
    And that curiosity has killed more than one cat...

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 15:59

      Yes, Granny Smith is definitely an ominous old lady.

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  7. Sandra Crook29 November 2017 at 16:13

    Knee licking... now that says it all...

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  8. Lynn Love29 November 2017 at 17:28

    It's a modern fairy tale, the smiling granny who tunrs out to be a witch who eats children. Well written tale Susan

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  9. Iain Kelly29 November 2017 at 19:01

    That's put me right off eating apples! Great story.

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  10. Scott29 November 2017 at 19:02

    Gotta love a well-crafted, short horror story!!!
    Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/11/29/friday-fictioneers-a-memory-a-fear-glad-i-am-older/
    Scott

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  11. Alice Audrey29 November 2017 at 20:25

    Curiosity killed the cat. This kind of reminds me of Hansel and Gretel.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 20:29

      I had no intention of writing a fairy story - and it's interesting that that seems to be how it's being interpreted by lots of readers. :)

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  12. Penny Gadd29 November 2017 at 21:02

    I, too, felt it was a fairy story. As that apparently wasn't your intention, I wonder why I did? perhaps I was too uncomfortable with the idea of a cannibalistic granny...Definitely an effective horror story, Susan!

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 21:15

      Yes, I was thinking more 'horror' than 'fairy story', but it doesn't matter. The only thing that matters is that my stories entertain. :)

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  13. The Silver Fox29 November 2017 at 21:19

    Add me to the list of those who think of this alongside stories like that of Hansel and Gretel. Granny Smith is creepy indeed!

    Speaking of Hansel & Gretel, have you ever seen Hansel & Gretel: Witch Hunters? It's a funny "sequel" to the original story.

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    1. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 21:22

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    2. Susan A Eames29 November 2017 at 21:51

      Yes, she might have a roly-poly smile, but don't be taken in!
      No, I haven't seen that sequel - must look out for it. :)

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  14. Anonymous29 November 2017 at 22:36

    what at ending. it caught me totally by surprise.

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  15. Vivian Zems30 November 2017 at 00:42

    Eeek! A cannibal Nana!!.....we're in real trouble now!

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    1. Susan A Eames30 November 2017 at 10:04

      Well, to be honest we don't know if she actually eats the children, or simply murders them.

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  16. Anurag Bakhshi30 November 2017 at 06:57

    But at least it satisfied her curiosity (in addition to satisfying the cannibal's appetite of course)

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    1. Susan A Eames30 November 2017 at 10:07

      Ah, another reader who has made the cannibal assumption. This is proving to be an interesting lesson in interpretation. :)

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  17. draliman30 November 2017 at 08:08

    Ooh, nice one! I love "bundles of curious children's bones" - says it all :-)

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    1. Susan A Eames30 November 2017 at 10:07

      Thanks, Alistair. Yes, children are innately curious aren't they?

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  18. Patsy30 November 2017 at 09:42

    Well, nobody can live just on apple pie, can they?

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    1. Susan A Eames30 November 2017 at 10:08

      Ha ha - yes, but does she really eat them? Only you can decide.

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  19. liz young30 November 2017 at 13:23

    Eeek! Such a lovely old lady, too!

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    1. Susan A Eames30 November 2017 at 14:12

      Ha ha - yes, and the dear little ones get homemade apple pie!

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  20. Snow's Fissures and Fractures30 November 2017 at 14:50

    That was scary!

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  21. Anonymous30 November 2017 at 15:12

    You took this prompt to scary heights.

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    1. Susan A Eames30 November 2017 at 19:03

      Sometimes you gotta go with your imagination. :)

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  22. Unknown30 November 2017 at 23:32

    She should have read Hansel and Gretel and started to worry at the licking of the knees. That would have been enough for most to stop visiting Granny Smith. Great story.

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  23. C. E. Ayr30 November 2017 at 23:53

    Wonderfully gruesome.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 December 2017 at 12:57

      Ha ha - now that's two words you wouldn't normally put together!

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  24. Linda1 December 2017 at 01:55

    Oh my gosh! Granny Smith Apples turned into Granny Smith Monster!

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  25. Spicedmullings1 December 2017 at 06:47

    Oh no oh no!

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    1. Susan A Eames1 December 2017 at 12:58

      Sadly, yes. But at least it's fantasy... one hopes!

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  26. Anonymous1 December 2017 at 16:43

    Well, Granny Smith warned her. Now we know where she gets the lard that makes her pie crusts so flakey - Russell

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  27. Anonymous1 December 2017 at 20:27

    Knee licking apple named grannies... scary story i'd have needed that toilet if I had Found those bones.

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    1. Susan A Eames1 December 2017 at 21:13

      Yikes, I don't know if you'd have time with those footsteps approaching.

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  28. Keith's Ramblings2 December 2017 at 10:23

    I'll think of this when I make my apple crumble this afteroon with my beautiful Granny Smiths!

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    1. Susan A Eames2 December 2017 at 12:20

      He he - I love apple crumble nearly as much as Granny Smith.

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  29. Unknown2 December 2017 at 12:16

    oh my, this is a granny i need on my peace chasers team XD I feel she would become useful. Superbly HOrrific! I can't wait to read more! ♥Sin

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    1. Susan A Eames2 December 2017 at 12:20

      Yes, well she might have to feature again in future stories! :)

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  30. brudberg3 December 2017 at 16:59

    Ouch... this does not sound well... wonder what she did with the children... meat pies?

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    1. Susan A Eames3 December 2017 at 18:42

      Whatever it was, it wasn't good - not for the children anyway.

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