Wednesday, 27 June 2018

VERY SUPERSTITIOUS - 100 word story

This week's Friday Fictioneers picture of a music room gave me an idea. Let me know what you think.
PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields



VERY SUPERSTITIOUS!

Hey, cool room. 
How am I doing? Writing’s on the wall.
I’m not very superstitious, but the baby broke a mirror. Thirteen months old and now she chokes on boiled eggs.
I put new shoes on the table and stepped in doggie-do.
A black cat crossed me. Tripped and landed on my tush.
Annie spilt salt. Her cooking ain’t worth Jack Shit now!
I wish I didn’t believe in things I don’t understand…
Anyway, how’s your song writing? 
Seriously? 
Well, stroke my rabbit’s foot and give it a catchy tune because a hit song about superstition would be a wonder, Stevie.




I hope you enjoyed this story and I look forward to your comments. 


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56 comments:

  1. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields27 June 2018 at 12:34

    Dear Susan,

    The last line had me laughing out loud. Very clever play on words. I see the pun rising. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Susan A Eames27 June 2018 at 12:35

      Thanks, Rochelle. I'm pleased I made you laugh. :)

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  2. Sandra Crook27 June 2018 at 12:41

    Cool take. I'm not a Stevie Wonder fan but I'm guessing these are references to his songs? Full marks for originality.

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    1. Susan A Eames27 June 2018 at 14:02

      Thanks, Sandra. If you're not familiar with Superstition, may I respectfully suggest you listen to it on Youtube? I defy anyone not to start moving when they hear the melody.

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  3. Iain Kelly27 June 2018 at 13:43

    Haha, lovely - and one of the great songs :-)

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    1. Susan A Eames27 June 2018 at 14:03

      Thanks, Iain. Yes, it has to be one of my all time favourite songs!

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  4. Anita Sabat27 June 2018 at 16:38

    Cool idea! That will be a creative super-hit song, Susan :)

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  5. Susan A Eames27 June 2018 at 17:34

    He he. It was, Anita, it was.

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  6. Lynn Love27 June 2018 at 17:48

    Ha! I love that song! Love the way too that you weaved it into your story, using but twisting the lyrics a little to suit your story. Well Done

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    1. Susan A Eames27 June 2018 at 18:24

      Thanks, Lynn. I like to think that maybe that's how he conceived the idea for the song! :

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  7. Dale27 June 2018 at 19:23

    What a great idea for a post. Of course I googled the lyrics to see how much of them you incorporated ;-) Just enough, I say!
    Fun stuff.

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    1. Susan A Eames27 June 2018 at 22:19

      Thanks, Dale. Yes, you have to be careful not to quote song lyrics in full, so I tried to be inventive with this story. :)

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  8. The Silver Fox27 June 2018 at 22:18

    Funny! Didn't see it coming. Reminds me of a routine I used to do about another Stevie --Winwood -- who (in my silly story) was a good friend of mine. I kept saying things that he turned into songs, without giving me any credit.

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  9. Anonymous28 June 2018 at 06:01

    Had to listen to the song :) Lovely take on the prompt and song, Susan :) Justjoyfulness

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 09:58

      Thanks for commenting. It's a great song, isn't it?

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  10. draliman28 June 2018 at 09:19

    A slave to superstitions... Nice last line :-)

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 09:59

      Personally, I don't hold with superstitions, but my mother was a terror for them. Thanks for commenting, Alistair.

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  11. liz young28 June 2018 at 10:02

    Very clever - loved the final joke!

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  12. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 10:03

    Thanks, Liz. Good to know you enjoyed and 'got' it! :)

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  13. Helen Baggott28 June 2018 at 10:52

    That made me chuckle. A lovely, lovely story.

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 15:02

      Ah thanks, Helen - great to know you enjoyed it!

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  14. Linda28 June 2018 at 12:42

    This was fun to read. Great last line.

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 15:04

      Thanks for the feedback, Linda - always appreciated!

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  15. Aesop Clerk28 June 2018 at 14:11

    :-) A clever take.

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 15:05

      Thank you for commenting - glad you liked the story. :)

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  16. Alice Audrey28 June 2018 at 18:49

    I love it! Except now I have the song running through my head.

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 21:03

      He he - but at least it's a nice song, isn't it?

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  17. brudberg28 June 2018 at 19:19

    Ha ... great topic for a song... good to have friends like that

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    1. Susan A Eames28 June 2018 at 21:04

      Well I figure that since we get ideas for stories from conversations with friends, why not song lyrics?

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  18. plaridel29 June 2018 at 00:49

    what a great tribute to mr. stevie. well done.

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  19. Keith's Ramblings29 June 2018 at 08:34

    Haha, what a great story. How about 'With a little bit of luck'?

    Click to read my FriFic tale

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  20. Michael Wynn29 June 2018 at 11:04

    I thought this very clever and I didn't see the ending coming at all. It made me smile

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    1. Susan A Eames29 June 2018 at 11:46

      Thanks for the feedback, Michael. I'm glad the story made you smile. :)

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  21. Penny Gadd29 June 2018 at 15:37

    Good take on the prompt, Susan!

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  22. Susan A Eames29 June 2018 at 18:02

    Thanks, Penny - glad you liked it. :)

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  23. Alicia29 June 2018 at 18:25

    Ha! Such fun. I love Stevie Wonder and Very Superstitious is one of my favorites. If I had a dime for every time I've danced to that song, I'd be a very wealthy woman.

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    1. Susan A Eames30 June 2018 at 09:59

      Thanks, Alicia. I know what you mean - just have to hear those opening notes!

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  24. Anonymous29 June 2018 at 19:14

    I love your story. Superstition won the day hands down in my childhood home, bless my mother's elegant loving soul, so I am also totally empathetic. Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.

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    1. Susan A Eames30 June 2018 at 10:00

      Always lovely to hear that someone has enjoyed my story. Thanks for commenting, Jilly.

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  25. Ellie Scott30 June 2018 at 07:21

    Love this! Superstition is my favourite Stevie Wonder song - I love the idea of it growing from a scene like this.

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    1. Susan A Eames30 June 2018 at 10:01

      Yep - definitely my favourite too, Ellie. We all get ideas through observation and conversation, so why not ideas for song lyrics? :)

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  26. Brenda Cox30 June 2018 at 11:11

    Very creative take, made me laugh! =)

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    1. Susan A Eames30 June 2018 at 16:55

      Thanks, Brenda - always good to know when someone appreciates my sense of humour! :)

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  27. Russell Gayer30 June 2018 at 15:32

    Clever take on the prompt, Susan. Big grins from me.

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    1. Susan A Eames30 June 2018 at 16:55

      Thanks for commenting, Russell. Big grins sounds good to me! :)

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  28. lisarey1990@gmail.com30 June 2018 at 22:28

    Very original.

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  29. Sascha Darlington1 July 2018 at 00:36

    Very good. I like how you tied it all in with the Stevie Wonder song. Excellent!

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  30. Susan A Eames1 July 2018 at 09:56

    Thanks, Sascha. I had to google the lyrics because although I know and love the song - I didn't know all the words. :)

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  31. Fatima Fakier1 July 2018 at 13:01

    Clever last line, now I'm going to google the song lyrics ;) Earlier on Dale had me opening up my iTunes for my Country playlist

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    1. Susan A Eames1 July 2018 at 21:03

      He he - it's a brilliant song. Thanks for commenting, Fatima. :)

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  32. Patsy29 July 2018 at 18:27

    Ha! I didn't see that coming (no pun intended).

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Many thanks for commenting. I appreciate your feedback.

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