Wednesday 1 August 2018

PLAIN SIGHT - 100 word story

After a short summer break I looked at this week's Friday Fictioneers photo prompt and came up with this little story. Is Willie harmless or sinister? You decide.


Sandra Crook


PLAIN SIGHT

When Willie nearly burnt his house down, Jane took him in. His foibles were mostly manageable, but when Willie built a stack of broken terracotta and kindling, Jane got annoyed.
'You've created an eyesore, Dad.'
'Now then, Jane lass. Where else can they hide?'
'And just who are they?'
'Hush, lass, someone might hear.' He leaned towards his daughter. 'My stack allows them to hide in plain sight.'
Jane gave up. 'Alright, but no lighting fires.'
Willie crouched in front of the pallets. 'Alright lads,' he whispered. 'She hasn't caught on.'
The stack shivered and crackled in reply.
Willie chuckled.



I hope you enjoyed this story and I look forward to your comments. 


If you wish to read more Friday Fictioneers stories, you can find them listed HERE




If you'd like to join in the challenge, you'll find all the information posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields 
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62 comments:

  1. He's fanciful but harmless. So far

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    1. Considering he nearly burnt his own house down...? :)

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  3. I don't know if he was sinister or just demented, but he gives me the creeps!

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  4. Something tells me a fire is coming.

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  5. I think he enjoys the world in which he lives. So that's fine. :)

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    1. He's certainly living in his own little world!

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  6. I don't necessarily think that Willie's the one who "nearly burnt his house down." I think that maybe "they" did it.

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    1. He he - now that's something worth considering!

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  7. Uh oh. Shivered and crackled? I feel for her.

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  8. She might have a problem with her Dad and his stack. :)

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  9. You've given Willie a lovely, friendly Yorkshire voice, and your story is a fun, imaginative take on the prompt.

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  10. Sounds like Willie is playing with fire--again.

    Deborah

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    1. Yes, Jane's going to have to keep an eye on him. Thanks for commenting, Deborah.

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  11. He's in league with the fire people, she better get a hose nearby. Great imagination.

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    1. Thanks for the comment, Gah - glad you liked it.

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  12. Dear Susan,

    That last line left me crackling and shivering a bit. Imaginative story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yes, Jane might have a problem. Thanks for commenting, Rochelle.

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  13. ooooo....the stack shivered and crackled. Sounds a lot like fire to me. Well done.

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    1. Yes, there's something going on in that stack!

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  14. i think he's playfully crazy. it's time to commit him to the mental institution. :)

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    1. That could be true - maybe only he could hear the crackling. :)

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  15. Hehe! She doesn't know what's coming. Great story! Makes you wonder what kind of little monsters he is hiding over there.

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    1. Whatever they may be, I don't want to encounter them. :)

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  16. Ooh, I can't decide! You've cleverly not used any adjectives which would lean me one way or the other, so I'm giving him the benefit of the doubt. For now... :-)

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    1. He he - he might be harmlessly nutty, Alistair. :)

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    1. Thanks, Jennifer. This is the sort of story that deserves a sequel... maybe!

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  18. A good one! Keeps us guessing.

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    1. Thanks, Darlene. Yes, sometimes I have to leave a story open to interpretation. :)

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  19. Eeek! Jane had better watch out!

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    1. Yes, I think she needs to keep a firm eye on Dad!

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  20. There is definitely trouble afoot... now whether or not dad is evil is hard to say... he may be a tad "touched" though...

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  21. Time to call Mr. Newt Scamander, me thinks. Willie surely has a colony of some magical creature in those stacks.

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  22. If it had cackled rather than crackled it would have been sinister.

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  23. Either he's got a problem or she's about to have one! Nice one Susan

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    1. Or a third possibility: they both continue happily in their own little worlds. :)

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  24. I crackled and shivered too. Willie is upto something. Dark and sinister. Like your story.

    Piyali from Wordpress

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  25. Nice one Susan. I think Willie is OK. Like the atmosphere of your story.

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  26. Thank you! Feedback always appreciated. :)

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  27. Quite an imagination! (At least we hope that's all it is).

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    1. Thanks for commenting - yes, it could be an ominous sign.

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  29. I am on Willie's side. I believe in the lads.

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  30. Dad has got his own army of bugs or are they just aliens in disguise? Of course he could be just stark raving mad instead ;-)

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    1. Thanks for commenting, Lisa. Yes, I deliberately left it open to interpretation. :)

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  32. I was very surprised that this was about her father, Susan, as I thought 'Jane took him in' referred to a child. It is definitely a sinister little tale. :)

    marion

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    1. Thanks for the feedback, Marion. I thought that saying: 'his house', would indicate that Willie was an adult. :)

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Many thanks for commenting. I appreciate your feedback.